to solve is to change to bre ak to leave a stone where the voice of water burns to solve is to bre athe to mock the volume the sheer vapidity of it You've already begun to chime when the straight line geometers a wrong circle and gasp; you've already lost out two breaths in this circle haventyou?
The breaks and structure of this is so perfect. I really like this piece, a lot.
There is no getting around structure it seems, and every honest attempt to thumb my nose at existing forms just hints at newer, inner ones. Thanks again Audra 🙂
I like the question mark, avoiding too much certainty, and the way that haventyou seems to be retreating into itself.
Lessening certainty is a worthwhile poetic deliverable – Thanks 🙂